写了篇作文，还是批改网写得，比赛作文，改了上百遍，我比较笨，还是上不了九十分，请大神们给点意见和建议。
谢谢了
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are thinking about their selection between high salary and the promising future. Folk*s views on job selecting vary from person to person. Some people hold the view that high paying job is prior to a promising job. However, others believe that the promising job is more beneficial to their future career. In my opinion, the job which is promising is much better than high salary job.
First of all, a promising job provides us with pleasure. It*s conspicuous that we are unable to live without money, but we may not live happily with only money either. Jack Ma said that the happiest period of time in his life was when he got paid 90 yuan each month, which verified us that our life is not determined by money. Secondly, promising job is equal to our dream which makes our life colorful and meaningful. Bill Gates* who chased his dream instead of continuing his further education showed us life is meaningful because of desire to achieve his dream. Lastly, a promising job dedicates a lot to the society. A man with ambition is able to make more achievements, which benefits more to our society continually. The successful people always make more contribution to the society than ordinary people do, whether they are on purpose or not.
To summarize, the promising job is superior to well-paid work. When we are considering the choice of career, we come to realize that occupation which is able to provide employees with a promising future while the well-paid work fails to.
谢谢了
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are thinking about their selection between high salary and the promising future. Folk*s views on job selecting vary from person to person. Some people hold the view that high paying job is prior to a promising job. However, others believe that the promising job is more beneficial to their future career. In my opinion, the job which is promising is much better than high salary job.
First of all, a promising job provides us with pleasure. It*s conspicuous that we are unable to live without money, but we may not live happily with only money either. Jack Ma said that the happiest period of time in his life was when he got paid 90 yuan each month, which verified us that our life is not determined by money. Secondly, promising job is equal to our dream which makes our life colorful and meaningful. Bill Gates* who chased his dream instead of continuing his further education showed us life is meaningful because of desire to achieve his dream. Lastly, a promising job dedicates a lot to the society. A man with ambition is able to make more achievements, which benefits more to our society continually. The successful people always make more contribution to the society than ordinary people do, whether they are on purpose or not.
To summarize, the promising job is superior to well-paid work. When we are considering the choice of career, we come to realize that occupation which is able to provide employees with a promising future while the well-paid work fails to.
